ONE NIGHT STAND-what do u think of my poem?

CANDLES LINE THE ROOM,



THE SMELL OF SWEET STRAWBERRIES SET THE MOOD,



AS OUR SKIN TOUCH WITH SO MUCH GRACE,



FIREWORKS LIGHT WITH EVERY EMBRACE.



TIME SLIPS AWAY DISAPPERS WITHOUT A TRACE,



OH PLEASE,



BABY PLEASE,



SLOW YOUR PACE.



AS NIGHT SEEM TO END,



AND THE DAY APPERS.



I FIND MY SELF HOLDING BACK TEARS,



FOR WHO IS THIS STRANGE LOVE I HOLD HAND IN HAND,



ONLY TO REMEMBER HE WAS MY ONE NIGHT STANDONE NIGHT STAND-what do u think of my poem?A few literals:

As our skin(s) touch (or as our skin touches).

Time slips away(,) Disappe(a)rs without trace

As night seem(s) to end

And the day appe(a)rs

I find myself (not my self).

Otherwise this is a pretty good attempt at poetry.ONE NIGHT STAND-what do u think of my poem?It's very..intimate, if you get my drift.



Mine please:

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